The Pirate Shop

The Pirate Shop Lucky Lulu was sinking quickly. “Abandon shop! Everyone into the Rockets!” hollered Captain Francisco. But the crew and passengers knew there were not enough Rockets, so they threw each other and even one delicious bowl overboard. Then everyone disappeared into the dirty stinky water and grabbed onto whatever they could.


Captain Hagrid ordered everyone to form a line, tie their crafts together, and sing “Finesse by Planet Mars”. First in line were Donald Trump and Jack Obama , bobbing in their expensive lamborghini. Next, came Jake Paul hanging on for dear life to a slimy dog poop They were followed by billions of cats.





After seven days, they were rescued by a strange man named Miguel wearing Hills Shoes . Not one passenger from the Lucky Lulu has taken a boat ride again.

The greatest showman/The Greatest Tom Jack

The Magic Show By Miguel


Jack was big tall man that had a short black hair, with a joyful smile and face. He wears a red coat and a shining white top with a gold looking armor at the front. He was holding a long mysterious magical wand up on the whispering gentle air. He also wears his black beautiful pants that was as long as his long legs. He had shoes that were as black as his pants. He was performing.






Jack had to fly on an aeroplane to perform on a stage in America called America’s Got talent. That is where people go when they want to show their incredible talents. The stage was incredibly enormous like it was a cage of a t-rex, and there was a lot of people cheering on every incredible tricks that they saw. Inside it smells like a cooked chicken. All you will be able to hear in the stage is people cheering or people booing.






So Jack attended to the show to show his amazing magic tricks that made the four judges say “Wow!”. One of the judges hit the golden buzzer which is the buzzer that puts you straight on the finals.






After a few months it was time to go to the finals so Jack prepared the magic tricks that he was going to show to the four rich judges. It was a long long drive until Jack and James his driver arrived there. Jack waited for the other performers to have their turn, after everybody had their turn it was time for Jack to go stand on the enormous stage. He was terribly nervous because he thought he might fail his amazing tricks and that he might not win. Jack didn’t fail his incredible magic tricks he actually made the four amazing judges say “Wow” again, and he made their mouths wide open as their eyes did the same.






After all that they were going to announced who the winner is. Jack was so nervous that he might not be the one. But when the judges announced who the winner is they shouted “Tom Jack”. Happy tears came out of Jack’s eyes and he shouted out “thank you”, loudly in to the microphone.

Characters Description:The greatest Tom Jack

Jack was big tall man that had a short black hair, with a joyful smile and face. He wears a red coat and a shining white top with a gold looking armor at the front. He is holding a long mysterious magical wand up on the whispering gentle air. He also wears his black beautiful pants that was as long as his long legs. He had shoes that were as black as his pants. He was performing.





Jack had to go on an aeroplane to perform on a stage in America called America’s got talent. That is were people go when they want to show their incredible talents.





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So Jack attended to the show to show his amazing magic tricks that made the four judges say “Wow!”. One of the judges hit the golden buzzer which is the buzzer that puts you straight on the finals. After a few months it was time to go to the finals so he prepared the magic tricks that he was going to show to the four rich judges. It was a long long drive until they got there. Jack waited for the other performers to have his turn, after everybody had their turn it was time for Jack to go stand on the enormous stage. He was terribly nervous because he thought he might fail his amazing tricks and that he might not win. Jack didn’t fail his incredible magic tricks he actually made the four amazing judges say “Wow” again. After all that they were going to announced who the winner is. Jack was so nervous that he might not be the one. But when the judges announced who the winner is they shouted





Mrs N said, Good to see you caught up after some off task time Miguel.


Well sequenced. Great description in the first paragraph.


Love the line ‘ He felt terribly nervous’.


Next Step: In the second paragraph slow down a little and describe the stage and setting , (sights, sounds, colours etc) where the competition was being held. Describe the judges, looks on their faces etc.


Next idea or part of story = new paragraph. I have put a couple of lines in for you. :)